“Tell me straight and tell me true, Else, my friend, to hell with you.”
-unknown origin
“What a mess!”
“Babble!”
“Corporate bullshit.”
That’s how some readers described yesterday’s example of a poorly written email.
The #1 problem with business communication… with emails… with writing… and with communication in general is this:
Confusion!
If your message is important, say it early and say it clearly.
Say it in the first sentence.
Even better, say it in the subject line.
Here’s the message the author of yesterday’s email disaster wanted to give:
As you know, our company is bankrupt. But please don’t worry, you’ll still have a place to work; we have just re-negotiated our lease and the Prague office will stay open.
Much better, don’t you think?
Tomorrow: Email Tip #2
These lovely lyrics remember me the irish pub songs lyrics, very nice and genuine…
About the email, in my opinion this confusion is just a way to hide the big problems and the bankrupt of the company for the customers don’t worry.
“Tell me straight and tell me true, Else, my friend, to hell with you.” – a very precise and well-rhymed formulated thought.
Good referral, clearly, understandably speaking.
– tell me true,
– with you.
Cheers.
Quite opposite than I understood yesterday.
Your way is simple and clear. Yesterday’s e-mail was like a politician’s response, a stream of off-topic words 🤣
Yes,this letter is perfectly understandable.
So , I was saying yesterday: they’re trying renegotiation white you the conditions .
And they hope keep you as customer.
The nice part of this corporate BS is that I got it right.
Oh, so simple and clear! Was it really difficult for the writer of email to bring out the core of the topic as briefly and concretely? Why was it necessary to make such a fog?
This will be a good lesson…
Yes, I think it’s better this way.
In this message, they directly present us with the situation of the company. They again try to keep us as their customers but their motives cannot convince us that the company will continue its work.
In my langue we say:Keep it short and concis or write briefly and concisely.I don’t know which one is corect.
This letter is understandable.
Thank you.